As a bit of an extension from my last post. We've been looking at poems that we can create through art. I've found a few great ones, and wrote a quick blurb of what I think the mean underneath. Let me know what you think of them!
Phantasia for Elvira Shatayev by Adrienne Rich
The cold felt cold until our blood
grew colder then the wind
died down and we slept
If in this sleep I speak
it's with a voice no longer personal
(I want to say with voices)
When the wind tore our breath from us at last
we had no need of words
For months for years each one of us
had felt her own yes growing in her
slowly forming as she stood at windows waited
for trains mended her rucksack combed her hair
What we were to learn was simply what we had
up here as out of all words that yes gathered
its forces fused itself and only just in time
to meet a No of no degrees
the black hole sucking the world in
I feel you climbing toward me
your cleated bootsoles leaving their geometric bite
colossally embossed on microscopic crystals
as when I trailed you in the Caucasus
Now I am further
ahead than either of us dreamed anyone would be
I have become
the white snow packed like asphalt by the wind
the women I love lightly flung against the mountain
that blue sky
our frozen eyes unribboned through the storm
we could have stitched that blueness together like a quilt
You come (I know this) with your love your loss
strapped to your body with your tape-recorder camera
ice-pick against advisement
to give us burial in the snow and in your mind
While my body lies out here
flashing like a prism into your eyes
how could you sleep You climbed here for yourself
we climbed for ourselves
When you have buried us told your story
Ours does not end we stream
into the unfinished the unbegun
the possible
Every cell's core of heat pulsed out of us
into the thin air of the universe
the armature of rock beneath these snows
this mountain which has taken the imprint of our minds
through changes elemental and minute
as those we underwent
to bring each other here
choosing ourselves each other and this life
whose every breath and grasp and further foothold
is somewhere still enacted and continuing
In the diary I wrote: Now we are ready
and each of us knows it I have never loved
like this I have never seen
my own forces so taken up and shared
and given back
After the long training the early sieges
we are moving almost effortlessly in our love
In the diary as the wind began to tear
at the tents over us I wrote:
We know now we have always been in danger
down in our separateness
and now up here together but till now
we had not touched our strength
In the diary torn from my fingers I had written:
What does love mean
what does it mean "to survive"
A cable of blue fire ropes our bodies
burning together in the snow We will not live
to settle for less We have dreamed of this
all of our lives
This poem is
about a group of women who died while mountain climbing, this poem had a
different style of first person narration, because it was told through the eyes
of a dead woman. The poem started off with the women slowly dying, and then
continued to say what she thought, and felt while laying dead on the cold
mountain. The poem was set on the Lenin
Peak Mountain, where the tragedy took place. The purpose of this story is to
show the strength, and determinations of these women. They never gave up, and never turned back,
even when they knew the odds of them making it to the top of the mountain were
not in their favour. The conflicts the
woman faced in this poem were breaking gender stereotypes, showing that women
are just as good as men, and the weather.
Although the weather was not the main conflict, it still played a part,
because in the end, it was the weather that stopped these women from completing
their goal. The audience that this poem appeals to is women of all ages, or
more specifically, women who are determined and want to make a point, or who
have been told that they cannot do something because of their gender. The voice in this poem is accomplished and
calm, not at all sad or frightened like it might have been thought to be. The woman feels successful, because she knows
that she will be talked about and admired a long time after her death. She has come to terms with that fact that she
is dead, and died peacefully doing what she loved to do. This poem was really well organized, and
demonstrated to the reader what the women’s thoughts were, without going into
too much detail.
Next Day by Randall
Jarrell
Moving
from Cheer to Joy, from Joy to All,
I
take a box
And
add it to my wild rice, my Cornish game hens.
The
slacked or shorted, basketed, identical
Food-gathering
flocks
Are
selves I overlook. Wisdom, said William
James,
Is
learning what to overlook. And I am wise
If
that is wisdom.
Yet
somehow, as I buy All from these shelves
And
the boy takes it to my station wagon,
What
I’ve become
Troubles
me even if I shut my eyes.
When
I was young and miserable and pretty
And
poor, I’d wish
What
all girls wish: to have a husband,
A
house and children. Now that I’m old, my
wish
Is
womanish:
That
the boy putting groceries in my car
See
me. It bewilders me he doesn’t see me.
For
so many years
I
was good enough to eat: the world looked at me
And
its mouth watered. How often they have
undressed me,
The
eyes of strangers!
And,
holding their flesh within my flesh, their vile
Imaginings
within my imagining,
I
too have taken
The
chance of life. Now the boy pats my dog
And
we start home. Now I am good.
The
last mistaken,
Ecstatic,
accidental bliss, the blind
Happiness
that, bursting, leaves upon the palm
Some
soap and water--
It
was so long ago, back in some Gay
Twenties,
Nineties, I don’t know . . . Today I miss
My
lovely daughter
Away
at school, my sons away at school,
My
husband away at work--I wish for them.
The
dog, the maid,
And
I go through the sure unvarying days
At
home in them. As I look at my life,
I
am afraid
Only
that it will change, as I am changing:
I
am afraid, this morning, of my face.
It
looks at me
From
the rear-view mirror, with the eyes I hate,
The
smile I hate. Its plain, lined look
Of
gray discovery
Repeats
to me: “You’re old.” That’s all, I’m
old.
And
yet I’m afraid, as I was at the funeral
I
went to yesterday.
My
friend’s cold made-up face, granite among its flowers,
Her
undressed, operated-on, dressed body
Were
my face and body.
As
I think of her I hear her telling me
How
young I seem; I am exceptional;
I
think of all I have.
But
really no one is exceptional,
No
one has anything, I’m anybody,
I
stand beside my grave
Confused
with my life, that is commonplace and solitary
This poem is written and interpreted through the
eyes of an older women. The purpose of
this poem is to communicate the struggle of one coming to terms with their own
mortality, and how strong of a desire one feels to be youthful again. This poem is intended to make the readers
feel connected, it is not very specific so it allows for everyone to relate
their own lives to this situation.
Although I feel everyone can relate to this situation in one way or
another, the intended audience would have to be people who are over the age of
50, or people who are struggling with the change of their physical appearance
because of aging. The voice of the women
telling the story is very sad. I think
that she is trying to make the best of her situation, but is having
difficulties coping with her old age. I
think that she regrets being so set on finding the perfect husband, and house,
and having children in her youth. I
think that she wishes to go back and just enjoy life instead of worrying who
she would marry. The voice in this poem
tells me that although the women is struggling, she keeps her problems to
herself. I think that she does not want
to burden anyone with the issues she faces.
This poem in well organized, it is a little choppy and jumps subjects a
bit, but it is easy to follow and keeps the reader intrigued. This poem is set in a grocery store, where
the old women thinks back to being young and reminiscences over her youthful
body. She thinks about how she is seen
now compared to how the world used to see her.
The main conflict in this poem is self against self, she is fighting a
battle she cannot win against her youthful self. It is very sad, but really
allows for the reader to empathize, or sympathize with the women.
Gretel in Darkness by
Louise Gluck
This is the world we wanted.
All who would have seen us dead
are dead. I hear the witch's cry
break in the moonlight through a sheet
of sugar: God rewards.
Her tongue shrivels into gas . . .
Now, far from women's arms
and memory of women, in our father's hut
we sleep, are never hungry.
Why do I not forget?
My father bars the door, bars harm
from this house, and it is years.
No one remembers. Even you, my brother,
summer afternoons you look at me as though
you meant to leave,
as though it never happened.
But I killed for you. I see armed firs,
the spires of that gleaming kiln--
Nights I turn to you to hold me
but you are not there.
Am I alone? Spies
hiss in the stillness, Hansel,
we are there still and it is real, real,
that black forest and the fire in earnest
This poem is about
either a girl, or women. She has done
something terrible for someone, and is trying to deal with it by herself. The purpose of this poem is to sum up some of
the events in this woman’s life, and demonstrate the way she feels about
them. The audience that this poem
appeals to could either be someone who loves somebody that doesn’t love them
back, or someone who has done something for somebody, only to have that person
walk away from them. The age group that
this poem would relate to most would be anywhere between 20-40, because between
these years, people face many heartbreaks, divorces, fights, and kids growing
up and leaving them, after all they’ve done for them. This poem would relate
mostly to women, but men could relate to it as well. The voice of this poem tells me that the
narrator is scared, angry, and lonely.
She is used to having people watching over her, and she does not like
being left without anyone. All she wants
is to love and to be loved in return.
This poem is well organized, it demonstrates the important events in
this woman’s life, and it becomes progressively harsher and darker to read as
the poem unfolds. This poem seems to be
set in the woman’s mind, she could be anywhere, but she feels like she is in a
dark forest, all alone, with nowhere to go.
The woman faces a conflict with her own actions over the course of this
poem, she is not proud of what she has done, and she now must live with the
consequences of it with no support from the ones she loves. She thinks back to the days when she was
loved, and she longs for those days to come once again.